As I have said I am 12 years old and I am in an AP U.S. course with an A+ average grade. I just wanted to post the Assignment that I had this week and my answer. I spent 6 hours on the assignment, which called for 200 words, It topped out at 1232 words,something like that. PLEASE post comments on my work, remember Im 12. ASSIGNMENT Railways, multiplied and spanning the continent, are essential domestic institutions – more powerful and more permanent than law, or popular consent, or political constitutions… They thoroughly complete the grand system… which fraternizes us into one people. – William Gilpin Directions: Consider the above quote from William Gilpin, and brainstorm a list of specific details that would either support or refute his statement. After you have made your brainstorm list, write a brief essay (about 200 words) analyzing the validity of his statement. ANSWER Please Respect My Like For Trains By John Houston Gardiner IV Railways, multiplied and spanning the continent, are essential domestic institutions – more powerful and more permanent than law, or popular consent, or political constitutions… They thoroughly complete the grand system… which fraternizes us into one people. – BRAINSTORMING Railways were extremely versatile(When a steam locomotive was bought, the buyer customized the locomotive with unique parts. This made the locomotives adapt to the need of the Railroad, but it also lead to the downfall of steam locomotives because manufactures encouraged not to customize.)(Also there were many different types of locomotives, each with its special job, such as Heislers*, Shays*, and Climaxes*.) and could be put into any envrioment(The Southern Pacific RR had a branch to Lone Pine, at Lone Pine there was another SP branch of narrow gauge* proportions that ran through the deserts of both California and Nevada.)(The lesser known Colorado Midland RR went through the highest mountains in Colorado. Built a few years before the Denver and Rio Grande Wester
Nice job…very interesting story. I would’ve given a hundred bucks for a PARAGRAPH break now and again, for the sake of my tired old eyes trying to follow along, but that was probably due to how you would’ve copy/pasted the story in here, and the process may have zapped out such paragraphs.
And so, yes, you can be proud of yourself! --Unca Roggie, age 61- 1/2
Good work John!!!
Keep up the spirit and keep on Model railroading!
TheK4Kid
58 years old and still playing with trains!
I have a 12 year old grandson - also named John. He’s also obsessed with trains - and a few other things. He’s in spec ed classes, and I hope that some day he will be able to write something half as good as you have written!! As earlier posted, sometimes pasting eliminates the paragraphs and some of the punctuation (I"m). Keep up the great work!![tup][tup][:)]
Great job John!
Outstanding work John. You should be very proud of yourself. Thank you for sharing with us.
Todd
The essay makes a lot of sense. Good work!
wow ! that’s great , i can’t imagine myself writing anything lke that at 12
however , if i was the teacher i’d fail you , the assignment called for 200 words and you didn’t meet that requirement . part of what you’re supposed to learn in an exercise like this is to be concise
http://dictionary.reference.com/search?q=concise
perhaps that isn’t what your teacher meant , and you’ll get full marks , you deserve it for the work you’ve done
ernie
Great essay, although I’m going to agree with ernie, if the thing called for 200 words, it’d be best to try to keep it as close to that as possible. I know that you’re passionate about the issue, but lets face it, if you’ve got a word requirement and you’ve gone over by over 1000 words, then you might very well get bombed on it. I really like the work, don’t get me wrong, but I’m thinking kinda like my wife (who is a teacher) that when you’re given a set of directions, you follow them to the best of your ability, no more, no less.
Excellent essay, and way ahead of a lot of 12-year olds I know. [bow][bow] Keep up the great work!
Jim in Cape Girardeau
I think that’s pretty durn good for any young student. You have every right to be proud of yourself. [tup] Furthermore, your willingness to share it and risk criticism shows maturity.
Well done! [bow]